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Emma - Year 7 Narrative5 highlighted corrections
Emma touched the handle that was colder than ice. Magic was not aloud to use magicallowed to use magic in the open world. From the field, the castle rose like a bomb in the grasslike a wound in the earth. Although every instinct warned her, Emma walked towards the castleEmma felt a pull she couldn't name. Then the hallway narrowed. When yet another large door was seen.Ahead of her loomed another door. and She didn't know what was going to come nextShe had no idea what awaited her.
Focus area
Sentence control
The draft is strongest when the action is clear. The next lift is making every suspense sentence complete, active, and easy to follow.
Sentence Structure - 4/6Next time
Word replacement
Replace broad or mismatched words with vocabulary that suits the mood, setting, and NAPLAN Vocabulary criterion.
like a bomb in the grasslike a wound in the earth
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